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For some reason the central image in my offering this week flared in my mind the moment I read the words of the prompt. I'm still not sure what my character means by what she tells her earth-bound companion. Perhaps one day I'll be wise enough to understand ...

50-Word Vignette #25

Prompt: It's Out There

Clifftop, tip-toe balancing, arms spread like wings.

"Wait," he called. "There's still time — "

She shook her head. "Too late. Can't you see?"

Confusion weighed him to the earth as she tip-tip-toed and tipped from the cliff.

"You never did understand." Her words bore her up and away. "It's out there — "

Anybody else like to join in and write their own? Just post it in the comments. All welcome.

Date: 2015-02-27 09:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
If she listens under the water, beneath the ebb, between the strands of weed, an old voice echoes and eludes. It’s a whisper from the beginning but she is in the middle now with no way back.
It’s out there, she knows it is. Tomorrow she will try once more.

Date: 2015-02-27 12:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Oo oo, do I sense a Soggy trickle?

Date: 2015-02-27 01:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
You might say that...
I couldn't possibly comment. ;)

Date: 2015-02-27 01:51 pm (UTC)

Date: 2015-02-27 10:59 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I think perhaps your 'she' is talking about freedom. Hers. Every woman's? And he, your poor 'he' is trapped in his un-flying world, lacking the wings 'she' so clearly has.

Date: 2015-02-27 12:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I reckon you could be right :O)

Date: 2015-02-27 12:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
"It's out there." I yelled
"Where?" he yelled back
"I don't know - somewhere - out there" I yelled panicked.
"Damn it!" his voice drifted back to me
it had fallen from where?
my hand? the bag? before that?
when did i miss it?
a part of me gone
my smart phone

Date: 2015-02-27 01:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Oh no!


Date: 2015-02-27 01:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]

The fact that yours is in the car & the battery's almost certainly dead makes it even funnier!!!

Date: 2015-02-27 01:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
ROFL! It so does :O)

Date: 2015-02-27 02:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
i had to "invent" just a bit
i don't have a smart phone LOL
just an old regular cell phone - not even the flip kind
and it is in the car - it has an address there
Cell Phone
Cottage Sylvy
at it's request i don't give the zipcode

Date: 2015-02-27 03:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
And after all,
we are in our own personal
little land of fiction!

Date: 2015-02-28 12:35 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
They went to overturn the desk. Papers went this way and that.

"I told you," said the raven Ink (short for Incorporated). "I told you it's out there. You won't find it here."

They started to pull books from the bookcase and toss them about.

"Caw," said Ink, bitterly. "Caw."

Date: 2015-03-01 10:10 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Always listen to the raven ;O)

Date: 2015-02-28 01:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Buses carried them through state after state, gears grinding, fumes drifting in the windows. Whenever they reached the end of a route, they bought another pair of tickets. They stared out the windows as they rode, searching. "We'll never stop until we find it," they agreed.

Date: 2015-02-28 04:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
i'm confused
it's a trip apparently looking for something but missing the prompt "it's out there"
Maybe what they are looking for isn't out there ?
reminds me of Simon & Garfunkle on the New Jersey Turnpike

"Kathy I'm lost" he said
maybe it wasn't out there
but he was

just confused

Date: 2015-03-01 12:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Yes, the prompt is implied rather than explicit, which I've enjoyed doing for several weeks now. In this case, "it's out there" is what they are thinking, what's driving them. "Kathy's Song" would indeed be a good theme for them.

I don't know if what they are looking for really is out there. But they believe it is. I worry they won't find it. But then, maybe what they really need is the searching, not the finding. Maybe the searching is what keeps them going and keeps them together.

Date: 2015-03-01 10:12 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Just a quick note to confirm that it's fine not to include the prompt word/phrase in the vignette. readthisandweep and I have also written vignettes in which the prompt is implicit, but not actually included :O)

Date: 2015-03-01 12:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
it's Jenny's site so Jenny's rules or lack of them : )
however, i think having to include the prompt word makes it more of a challenge - indirect is easy - and gives more, or less, words to work with
a strict 50 words and the obligation of the prompt, makes one more careful
each word has to count and both serve the prompt and advance the narrative as the vignette has to be self contained
at least, that is my take on this weekly exercise that expands my perspectives
Thank you, Jenny

Date: 2015-03-04 12:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
In my defence, I've omitted the prompt word twice. In #9 Captive (a mistake.) In #10 Potatoes I used the slang word 'spuds.'

I agree with Ivy. Without employing the prompt word or adhering to the 50-word criteria it ceases to be a challenge & I can't see the point.

PS: The above is fifty words. ;)

Date: 2015-03-06 11:29 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Ladies, can we please put discussion of rules to bed.

The Friday Vignettes are just a piece of fun. All are free to use the challenge as they wish, and to be as strict about wordcount and use of the prompt word/phrase as they want to be. There are only 5 of us who regularly take part, and I'd hate to see any of us put off.

Let's face it, life has enough challenges for us to face.


Date: 2015-03-06 11:40 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I apologise. 100%.
Being pedantic about the rules is just that.
Each to their own.

Forgive me if I don't join in this week, Jen.
I'm sure you understand why. ;)

Date: 2015-03-06 12:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thanks Carol. And of course I understand about this week.

I use the 'schedule a post' function on LJ to schedule my Friday posts on LJ several weeks ahead of the actual day. Thankfully, I've got a few lined up in the LJ cue, as I don't imagine I'll be fully blog-fit for a while.

Take care of yourself. xxx

Date: 2015-03-01 10:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I like this sense of the endless quest, and the fact that there might not be a goal to it; the search is the goal in itself.


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